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Post by spookythings on Nov 14, 2006 0:19:46 GMT -5
re-read it, hated it, deleted it. merry christmas!
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Post by PrinceJoshua on Nov 14, 2006 0:35:33 GMT -5
Wow. That was REALLY good! I agree with the moral.  |
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Post by domriver on Nov 14, 2006 0:37:25 GMT -5
Very nice  |
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Post by spookythings on Nov 14, 2006 1:14:23 GMT -5
thank you very, very much, princejoshua and domriver. its interesting talking to you on the boards and also in the cbox. |
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Post by PrinceJoshua on Nov 14, 2006 1:15:41 GMT -5
Same here. ;D
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Post by domriver on Nov 14, 2006 1:15:42 GMT -5
of course your very welcome just for that I am going to EXALT you one! you derserve it I guess. |
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Post by PrinceJoshua on Nov 14, 2006 1:16:20 GMT -5
Same for you dom. |
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Post by domriver on Nov 14, 2006 1:17:23 GMT -5
Ditto Joshua |
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Post by spookythings on Nov 15, 2006 23:41:51 GMT -5
why, thank you once again, domriver!
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Ralph Goat
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Post by Ralph Goat on Nov 17, 2006 16:51:42 GMT -5
It took me forever to finish reading it without being interrupted, sorry for the late-ish comment. XD
I think it is very good and nicely descriptive, and sticks to the plotline and the feel of ROR nicely. ^_^ And I love moral #2!! XD
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Post by spookythings on Nov 17, 2006 20:57:46 GMT -5
thank you for commenting at all, ralph! however, its garbage. it smells like poo. stinky, stinky, go away! *shoves story into coffin*
i'll do better next time... i hope.
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Post by PrincessJennifer on Nov 19, 2006 20:01:28 GMT -5
Very good!^^ I like both of the morals.
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Post by spookythings on Nov 24, 2006 20:53:09 GMT -5
thank you, princessjennifer. |
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Post by empressjess on Nov 30, 2006 19:37:14 GMT -5
I think you're being far too hard on yourself--while this piece wasn't perfect, it was by no means bad; I enjoyed it a lot!
Not having gotten the bad end yet (I figured I'd let myself go for it after the second time through) I'm not sure how much of this was canon and what wasn't, but I love that line about Amanda being all insistant about the rat and the one about Diana twising Meg's arm.
As for moral #2, that's how I felt the first time I played. My boyfriend asked me what I'd do if I were kidnapped by crazy little kids and I told him I'd probably never leave the bus.
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Post by spookythings on Dec 2, 2006 4:51:40 GMT -5
i used to be a much better writer (i was never that great, but i was able to transition better and come up with actual descriptions, unlike now where its just 'this is what happened, then this, then that, the end'), but i stopped for the better part of a year+ for lack of things to write about, and now i'm having a hard time getting back into it. this and my other one are crap, but i need the exercise and the critiques.
i'm very glad you liked it though, since i've adored your fanfics and really admire your style.
sadly for me, i don't know if i'd follow my own advice. curiousity would almost certainly get the better of me. being attacked by imps, headmasters and puking mermaids not withstanding, i also wouldn't mind being in jennifer's position, searching an old mansion/airship, uncovering old memories and clues, i love that kind of stuff.
maybe if you drove yourself?
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